Posted on March 14, 2008
Fruitful
dancing on the vine,
and rejoicing herein
beaming summer rays…
surely this be, but one,
of the coming down
shinning glory days
3-13-08
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Francis Meyrick said on March 14, 2008
This is a good word picture, where you have taken in the title just one word, and expanded nicely on it. This poem has warmth, and hope and sparkle.
Good job.
Fruitful
dancing on the vine, (nice)
and rejoicing herein
beaming summer rays… (nice)
surely this be, but one, ("surely this MUST be…"??)
of the coming down (coming down…as in "approaching", "on the way"…)
shinning glory days (typo: "shining")