SIMPLICITY
Posted on April 25, 2008
Many words can express
the simplicity of thought
this one, of great importance
“Namely, secure World Peace “
End the Wars-a noble wish.
the simplicity of thought
this one, of great importance
“Namely, secure World Peace “
End the Wars-a noble wish.
We need Peace now
Freedom of speech
safety for children
when they are at school.
The Earth needs our love
urgently decrease
the level of pollution
treat Mother Earth
with dignity and respect.
This simplicity of thought
straight from the heart
these thoughts, each day,
occupy my mind.
There is also a great need
for Faith in God
rebuilt the Trust
among all Citizens
these are very simple
but important thoughts.
© 2008 Zuzanna
Last edited by Zuzanna on May 8, 2008, 3:17 pm
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Hi Zuzannah… you’ve been busy! How’s your recovery going?
couple of suggestions…
Many words can express
the simplicity of thought
this one of great importance
(maybe: this one IS of great importance
or: this one, of great importance)
Secure the World Peace
(maybe: "Namely, secure World Peace")
End the Wars-a noble wish.
We need the Peace now
(better: We need Peace now)
Also the Freedom of speech
(Also: Freedom of Speech)
Safety for children
When they are at school.
The Earth needs our love
in decrease of pollutions
(Maybe: to decrease the level of pollution)
Treat Mother Earth
With dignity and respect.
This simplicity of thought
straight from the heart
they are each day
(Maybe: these thoughts, each day,)
Occupy my mind.
There is also (A?) great need
for the Faith in God
(Better: for Faith in God)
Trust shall be rebuild
(rebuilt)
among all Citizens
these are very simple
But important thoughts.
Great Truths ARE basically simple, aren’t they?
Hello Francis
Thank you so much for the suggestions
And for your time to evaluate.
I guess my mind was not working that great when writing this one.
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"Kindness, loyalty, appreciation and love, those are the finest ingredients in life"
By Zuzanna
No, your mind is working just fine. Don’t worry. This is all small stuff.
Your creative instinct/vision is just great. All we’re playing around with are tiny tricks of the trade, and minor grammar suggestions.
Don’t be discouraged in any way… that’s not what this is about. It’s all about having fun and learning from each other.