Zuzanna


SIMPLICITY

Posted on April 25, 2008

Many words can express
the simplicity of thought
this one, of great importance
“Namely, secure World Peace “
End the Wars-a noble wish.

We need Peace now
Freedom of speech
safety for children
when they are at school.

The Earth needs our love
urgently decrease
the level of pollution
treat Mother Earth
with dignity and respect.

This simplicity of thought
straight from the heart
these thoughts, each day,
occupy my mind.

There is also a great need
for Faith in God
rebuilt the Trust
among all Citizens
these are very simple
but important thoughts.

© 2008 Zuzanna

Last edited by Zuzanna on May 8, 2008, 3:17 pm


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3 responses to “SIMPLICITY”

  1. Hi Zuzannah… you’ve been busy! How’s your recovery going?
    couple of suggestions…

    Many words can express
    the simplicity of thought
    this one of great importance
    (maybe: this one IS of great importance
    or: this one, of great importance)
    Secure the World Peace
    (maybe: "Namely, secure World Peace")
    End the Wars-a noble wish.

    We need the Peace now
    (better: We need Peace now)
    Also the Freedom of speech
    (Also: Freedom of Speech)
    Safety for children
    When they are at school.

    The Earth needs our love
    in decrease of pollutions
    (Maybe: to decrease the level of pollution)
    Treat Mother Earth
    With dignity and respect.

    This simplicity of thought
    straight from the heart
    they are each day
    (Maybe: these thoughts, each day,)
    Occupy my mind.

    There is also (A?) great need
    for the Faith in God
    (Better: for Faith in God)
    Trust shall be rebuild
    (rebuilt)
    among all Citizens
    these are very simple
    But important thoughts.

    Great Truths ARE basically simple, aren’t they?

  2. Hello Francis

    Thank you so much for the suggestions
    And for your time to evaluate.

    I guess my mind was not working that great when writing this one.

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    "Kindness, loyalty, appreciation and love, those are the finest ingredients in life"
    By Zuzanna

  3. No, your mind is working just fine. Don’t worry. This is all small stuff.
    Your creative instinct/vision is just great. All we’re playing around with are tiny tricks of the trade, and minor grammar suggestions.
    Don’t be discouraged in any way… that’s not what this is about. It’s all about having fun and learning from each other.

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